perspective seems a bit off- the hallway seems to almost slant up- howwever i love that- gives the piece a sense of vertigo and surealism kinda llike "oh shit i'm dead" and the way minds play with ppls heads in hightened states...

nice use of selective color, but contrast and depth wise slightly lacking... you need more interesting things in the bacground, like a painting thaty's fallen off a wall or or an open window or something....(leading the viewer to wonder wether the little girl is actually a maid or just some crazy little girl who breaks into ritch ppls houses dressed as one) if you redo this piece eventually could have extream foreshortnig as she pulls the curtain aside (leaving blood stain of course)

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thanks a lot for the advice and you are right the perspective is totally off noticed it while doing but since it's done in pen i couldn't rectify it. as fot the backgroud I could still put a window or something maybe more blood...blood spatters on her face and dress...

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as i said perspective helps the drawing... iand as for more blood- drag marks leading into the doorwould pull the piecce together without making it overtly bloody and then ya some stains on her dress and a few drops on her face.. (subtle though)

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as for fixing the perfective, house of this era commenly had half wood side panling so could just run a line down two floor bourds in on the left side, into right where the curtion creases over her head (the dark one) and that'd fix it, but do it in pencel first to see if you like it... i'm fond of the vertigo XD

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i'll try it hehehe and maybe update the drawing who knows when i'll find time to do that though..

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Reminds me of a Bradbury story I read once, only it was a baby, instead of a girl. I like the detail work of hte hall and floor. Very cool.

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The style and perspective are very good. Nice character design and I really like the blood in the composition. Fine details.

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cool thanks, what was the bredbury story id like to try and find it hehe

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